tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post6141993101218271425..comments2023-06-11T20:40:30.199-04:00Comments on Here there be dragons...: Flash Fiction #4 - Garden of EdenLauren Cude Horsfallhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15713938333921978342noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-68188176786264561652009-09-17T15:50:32.819-04:002009-09-17T15:50:32.819-04:00Nice cliffhanger at the end. Did she actually hea...Nice cliffhanger at the end. Did she actually hear a voice? An unanswered question that leaves it up to the reader to sort through. I like that. Thank you for sharing.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00655810270242939262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-4595075876696524762009-09-15T20:59:17.570-04:002009-09-15T20:59:17.570-04:00I liked the ending. It made me feel scared and ho...I liked the ending. It made me feel scared and hopeful for her at the same time. <br />~ChrisChris Chartrandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09766438158698041660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-5995786230599171412009-09-15T16:48:04.254-04:002009-09-15T16:48:04.254-04:00Stories like this are why I love flash fiction. It...Stories like this are why I love flash fiction. It would have been unfair to leave us hanging in a longer piece of writing, but here it works great.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-44903339957408001502009-09-15T10:27:35.107-04:002009-09-15T10:27:35.107-04:00I like the idea of her landing in a place that sho...I like the idea of her landing in a place that shouldn't exist. This definitely feels like it needs to continue, that ending is just a start. Great stuff.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-45364052882302683582009-09-14T16:13:24.934-04:002009-09-14T16:13:24.934-04:00I had to laugh about mom's comment regarding t...I had to laugh about mom's comment regarding the PhD.<br /><br />Poor thing. this is like Survivor on steroids -- I guess it doesn't pay to be too curious. :)<br /><br />Great job -- although now I'll be worried about whether she went nuts or if she's going to find Chris.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05660181882760446931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-55615082106839414062009-09-13T19:35:51.290-04:002009-09-13T19:35:51.290-04:00Richly detailed, and ending was like you threw you...Richly detailed, and ending was like you threw your reader out of the plane into the unknown! (What? Where's the rest?) Nicely done!CJ Hodges MacFarlanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16833789408143274185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-83363973003430601882009-09-13T12:47:59.550-04:002009-09-13T12:47:59.550-04:00I posted it. Put in a couple of links to your site...I posted it. Put in a couple of links to your site. Thanks.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/tiki-view_blog.php?blogId=1noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-12519178046497514532009-09-13T11:02:06.860-04:002009-09-13T11:02:06.860-04:00Hi Jon,
No problem :)
Look forward to seeing ...Hi Jon,<br /><br />No problem :) <br /><br />Look forward to seeing it!<br /><br />Cheers,<br /><br />LaurenLauren Cude Horsfallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15713938333921978342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-2979118706250120812009-09-13T10:49:04.459-04:002009-09-13T10:49:04.459-04:00Hi, Lauren. I'm writing a blog post and the pi...Hi, Lauren. I'm writing a blog post and the picture to accompany it is a shot of me reading your story on my iPod touch. Since it's your site, I figured I should ask you if it's OK for an image of your site to be used. You OK with that?<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/tiki-view_blog.php?blogId=1noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-81875547469065807942009-09-12T18:47:24.982-04:002009-09-12T18:47:24.982-04:00I liked it. It did slow down in the middle, but it...I liked it. It did slow down in the middle, but it is a good story overall. Thanks for posting.<br />-jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://jmstrother.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-30790913683195965292009-09-12T11:09:05.745-04:002009-09-12T11:09:05.745-04:00kinda like the plane ride...an ambiguous end..you&...kinda like the plane ride...an ambiguous end..you're teasing me here i want resolution but maybe it is not to be had.., leaves me thinking...Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-34081487909652550062009-09-12T09:49:19.363-04:002009-09-12T09:49:19.363-04:00Yeah there was something not-quite-right about it ...Yeah there was something not-quite-right about it that I couldn't put my finger on; I think PJ nailed it about the pace. Thanks!Lauren Cude Horsfallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15713938333921978342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-35703832631274628762009-09-12T08:35:46.772-04:002009-09-12T08:35:46.772-04:00What a very good story! I, too, am holding my brea...What a very good story! I, too, am holding my breath hoping that help is coming...<br /><br />Re what PJ said, maybe it would change the pacing if it were written in present tense, so we experience it along with the woman.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-65334831247343605252009-09-11T23:32:23.434-04:002009-09-11T23:32:23.434-04:00Ooo - there's that unresolved ending ...! Inde...Ooo - there's that unresolved ending ...! Indeed, she might've gone nuts as Shannon suggests - or maybe it's Chris! Something about the pacing seems a bit slow to me in spite of all the action - maybe it's because much of it is a flashback? I'm not sure why, exactly. But i like the story - it's certainly dramatic :-)PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-73177731538154569352009-09-11T22:35:55.865-04:002009-09-11T22:35:55.865-04:00Hey! Nooo, you can't end it there! LOL. She we...Hey! Nooo, you can't end it there! LOL. She went nuts didn't she? Sigh. Way to hook em. :-)shannon espositohttp://murderinparadise.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-25527848291353529532009-09-11T22:13:48.333-04:002009-09-11T22:13:48.333-04:00Great story. Great little bits of detail that rea...Great story. Great little bits of detail that really make it work. Now. Where the heck is Chris :PAnthony Deaverhttp://www.bishopneo.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6824113650836829685.post-50239380826933651152009-09-11T22:04:18.704-04:002009-09-11T22:04:18.704-04:00Very nice! Of course, now you'll leave me fore...Very nice! Of course, now you'll leave me forever wondering if she really heard someone or not...Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.com